Well done Thomas you have written a good argument sharing your opinion. You have included an opinion, emotive language like shocking, and evidence to back up you opinion. Good work.
Next time you need to show more control when using capital letters and full stops. You also need to include more connectives (other than because) to keep your writing interesting.
Well done Thomas you have written a good argument sharing your opinion. You have included an opinion, emotive language like shocking, and evidence to back up you opinion. Good work.
ReplyDeleteNext time you need to show more control when using capital letters and full stops. You also need to include more connectives (other than because) to keep your writing interesting.